Poetry Train
Into the Chasm
I stare into the chasm,
Studying the blackness
And wondering
Will it hurt when I land?
A light catches my attention,
Drawing my gaze to the other side
And thinking
Will it burn when I touch it?
Your face appears before me,
Smiling with hope in your eyes
And asking
Will I join you when I’m ready?
The darkness of the abyss frightens me,
Causing fear to boil in my heart
And feeling
Will I die when I step off the edge?
You call to me,
Begging me not to ignore you
And holding
Will you catch me when I make the choice?
I reach out with my hand,
Spanning the canyon
And touching
Will you protect my heart when I give it to you?
Our fingers caress,
Entwining together for strength
And trusting
Will we love forever when I bridge the chasm?
You nod.
I believe.
We’re together.
I stare into the chasm,
Studying the blackness
And wondering
Will it hurt when I land?
A light catches my attention,
Drawing my gaze to the other side
And thinking
Will it burn when I touch it?
Your face appears before me,
Smiling with hope in your eyes
And asking
Will I join you when I’m ready?
The darkness of the abyss frightens me,
Causing fear to boil in my heart
And feeling
Will I die when I step off the edge?
You call to me,
Begging me not to ignore you
And holding
Will you catch me when I make the choice?
I reach out with my hand,
Spanning the canyon
And touching
Will you protect my heart when I give it to you?
Our fingers caress,
Entwining together for strength
And trusting
Will we love forever when I bridge the chasm?
You nod.
I believe.
We’re together.
c. 2008 T.A. Chase
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11 Responses “Poetry Train”
Awesome, Jill. It makes me smile to know that something I wrote gave you an idea for your poem. 🙂
I came yesterday and read the poem, but since I really enjoye it, it gave me an idea for a new poem, and I didn’t comment!
Not saying I don’t like your poem (I always do) but dang, Out of Bounds is up but not available yet! What’s with that?? It’s Tuesday at my house 😉
Still, it is this week, so I’m doing a bit of a happy dance.
Thanks, Jambrea and it’s great to have you stop by. 🙂
That was just wonderful TA. 🙂
Julia,
Thanks..it took a stanza or two to decide that the form I started with works. 🙂 And it was tough…lol
I like the form you ended up with for this poem. And this is my favorite stanza:
‘The darkness of the abyss frightens me,
Causing fear to boil in my heart
And feeling
Will I die when I step off the edge?’
Thanks, Missy and you’re right. That “I’m” throws off the flow. 🙂
Brilliant! One suggestion (take it or leave it), take out “I’m” in the third line of the second stanza. That one word disrupts the flow for me. Other than that, it would be difficult to improve upon.
Well, I am sorry I made you cry, Melissa, but I’m glad you liked it.
It started out as being rather depressing, yet as I continued to write it, I found that it ended up being happy. 🙂 (which doesn’t always happen with my poems.)
Thanks for making me cry into my coffee, TA. Still this was very beautiful, especially the last lines. You need to put these in a collection because I so would love to curl up in my favorite chair with a blanket on a rainy Saturday and read these verses to my heart’s content.
Happy Monday!
Melissa