Poetry Train…
This is part of a poem. I was interrupted before I could finish it, so I only got the first two stanzas written. When I finish the whole thing, I’ll make sure to post it (someday) for everyone. 🙂
Words have been lost
Sweet songs you sang are silent
With my eyes shut,
I’ve lost the memory of your face.
My arms are empty.
My soul is lonely.
I wish for night to fall
Hiding my missing heart.
12 Responses “Poetry Train…”
TA – come by when you have a sec – have surprise for you on today’s post….
“my soul is lonely”
this is very powerful and you could leave it like this but I can’t wait to see what else you do!
On another note: it’s Tuesday here! just kidding – sort of. sigh, I’ll be a good girl and wait for actual sunlight.
I agree that it already stands alone as a powerful two-stanza poem. I especially like:
“With my eyes shut,
I’ve lost the memory of your face.”
Very layered.
Oh, TA. This narrator’s hurting, dude. I’m hoping that anything that follows will give the guy some relief!
Very nicely done, of course. You have a real feel for this sort of thing.
So sad. More stanzas in this vein might be brutal. But brutal=powerful.
good as it is!
oh my, i love it.*sigh* just beautiful.
Oh, what heartbreak! I like this just the way it is — it already has a sense of completeness and finality.
I like it. It could stand alone. Looking forward to seeing it finished!
Hey TA, I haven’t had enough caffeine today to think of an appropriate comment. People are going to love it, though.
TA-they are powerful but sad words!
They suit my mood today:(
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TA, those first two stanzas are powerful! I can’t wait to see the rest but it actually works as is.