Poetry Train…

This is part of a poem. I was interrupted before I could finish it, so I only got the first two stanzas written. When I finish the whole thing, I’ll make sure to post it (someday) for everyone. 🙂

Words have been lost

Sweet songs you sang are silent

With my eyes shut,

I’ve lost the memory of your face.

My arms are empty.

My soul is lonely.

I wish for night to fall

Hiding my missing heart.

Hope everyone has a wonderful Monday and stop by Rhian’s blog for a list of other people joining in the Poetry Train today.

12 Responses “Poetry Train…”

  1. Rhian / Crowwoman says:

    TA – come by when you have a sec – have surprise for you on today’s post….

  2. Gina, Book Dragon says:

    “my soul is lonely”

    this is very powerful and you could leave it like this but I can’t wait to see what else you do!

    On another note: it’s Tuesday here! just kidding – sort of. sigh, I’ll be a good girl and wait for actual sunlight.

  3. julia says:

    I agree that it already stands alone as a powerful two-stanza poem. I especially like:

    “With my eyes shut,
    I’ve lost the memory of your face.”

    Very layered.

  4. Susan Helene Gottfried says:

    Oh, TA. This narrator’s hurting, dude. I’m hoping that anything that follows will give the guy some relief!

    Very nicely done, of course. You have a real feel for this sort of thing.

  5. Dewey says:

    So sad. More stanzas in this vein might be brutal. But brutal=powerful.

  6. Anne Douglas says:

    good as it is!

  7. Y says:

    oh my, i love it.*sigh* just beautiful.

  8. Robin L. Rotham says:

    Oh, what heartbreak! I like this just the way it is — it already has a sense of completeness and finality.

  9. Finlands finest says:

    I like it. It could stand alone. Looking forward to seeing it finished!

  10. Lisa Andel says:

    Hey TA, I haven’t had enough caffeine today to think of an appropriate comment. People are going to love it, though.

  11. Yvonne says:

    TA-they are powerful but sad words!
    They suit my mood today:(

    To pick up on a string from last week. Allromanceebooks.com has really good reviews of MM romances.

  12. Rhian / Crowwoman says:

    TA, those first two stanzas are powerful! I can’t wait to see the rest but it actually works as is.

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